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1Direction:Forthispart,youareallowedthirtyminutestowriteacompositiononthetopicHowIFinanceMyCollegeEducation.
Youshouldwriteatleast120words,andbaseyourcompositionontheoutline(giveninChinese)below.
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上大学的费用(tuitionandfees)可以通过多种途径解决2.
哪种途径适合于我(说明理由)Nowadays,tuitionandfeesforcollegearemuchhigherthaneverbefore.
Howtofinanceyourcollegeeducationhasbecomeamatterofconcernformany.
Youcandealwithinmanyways.
Youcangetallofthemoneyfromyourparents.
Youcanapplyforaloanespeciallysetupforcollegestudents.
Youcanalsoacquirethemoneycompletelybyyourself,doingafull-timejobinsummerorwinterholiday.
Inaddition,youcanaskyourparentsformostofitandearntherestinyoursparetimeincollege,bydoingapart-timejob.
改写Youcan1theproblemcanbedealtwithinmanyways.
2Yourparentscangiveyoualotofmoney.
3Aloanisalsoavailable.
4apart-timejobisapartialsolution注:1.
第一句引言.
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太多youcan重复使用,缺乏变化Inmyopinion,Ipreferthelastway.
Havingacquiredmostofthetuitionandfeesfrommyparents,Ineedn'tworrytoomuchaboutthemoneyandcanconcentrateonmystudy;ontheotherhand,apart-timejobinmysparetimemakesmycampus-lifecolorful.
Icanmakealotoffriends,improvemyabilitiesandlearnlotsofknowledge.
So,Ichoosethiswaytocovermytuitionandfees.
缺点:缺少连贯性一致性\发展性\连贯性HowIFinanceMyCollegeEducationPreviouslyinChina,auniversityeducationwasfundedbythegovernment.
Thissituationischangingandstudentsmustnowfinancetheirowneducation.
Asaresult,studentsarenowfacedwiththequestion"howtopayformycollegeeducation"注:This指代前文Thereareseveralpossiblewaystoraisethemoneytopayforfeesandtuitions.
Parentsareasourceforcollegefunding,asisthecasewithmoststudents.
Scholarshipsarealsoavailableforstudentswithoutstandingacademicperformance.
Becausescholarshipsarecompetitive,theyarenotavailabletoeveryone.
Studentscanalsotakeoutaloanfromthebank.
Bankscanprovideloanstostudentswithoutcollateralforthosewhoneedthem.
And,manystudentscantakeonpart-timejobstohelpfinancetheireducation.
IncitiessuchasBeijing,ShanghaiandGuangzhou,therearemanypart-timejobopportunitiesforstudentsbothonandoffcampus.
注:1.
source来源,TVprogramismainsourceofmypleasure.
电视是我欢乐的主要来源2.
available重要词汇,Areyoustillavailable你还单身吗3.
takepart-timejob打工,还可以用dooutjob\holdtemporaryjob4.
onandoff校园内外Personally,Ibelieveascholarshipisthebestwaytofundaneducationasitnotonlypaysforfeesandtuition,butalsoencouragesstudyinghard.
MyViewonFakeCommoditiesTheprevalenceoffakecommoditieshasbeenabigprobleminoursociety.
Almosteverydaynewspaperscarryarticlespertainingtofakecommodities.
Althoughmeasureshavebeenimplementedtodealwiththisproblem,itstillremainsaseriousthreat.
Fakegoodsareharmfulonmanylevels.
Peoplesellfakecommoditiestomakeaquickprofitwhichunderminestheeconomyandfakegoodscanalsobedangeroustoone'shealth.
Theeffectisageneralmistrustamongconsumerstowardsellersandthefreemarketingeneral.
Inaddition,manyfakecommoditieshavebeenexportedoverseaswhichhasresultedinapoorreputationforgoodscomingoutofChinaandhashadanegativeinfluenceonexports.
Thereareseveralwaystoaddressthisproblem.
Lawsandregulationsshouldbeimplemented/make/workouttobanthemanufacturinganddistributionoffakegoods.
Atthesametime,consumersshouldbeeducatedtoenhancetheawarenessofidentifythesefakegoods.
Withtoughlawsandaneducatedpublic,fakegoodswillbecomeathingofthepast.
用MyViewOnFakeCommodity改写BrainDrainBrainDrainBraindrainisadelicateproblemwithwhichourcountryisconfronted.
Inthelasttenyearsorso,alotofscientistsandtechnicianshaveswarmedintodevelopedcountriesforfurtherstudiesorresearchwork,letalonenumerouspromisingstudents.
Andtherearenoindicationsthattheywillbebackhomebeforelong.
Ourcountryhaspaidtheexpensesoftrainingthembutlostthem.
HowdidthatcomeaboutItisself-evidentthattheirdelayofcomingbackisduetothosefavorableworkingandlivingconditionswhichareessentialtoresearchwork.
Sophisticatedequipmentmakesiteasierforonetogainacademicachievements.
Ourcompetentscientistsabroadareofferedhigherrewardsandgreateropportunitieswhichcontributetotheirsuccessincareer.
Itseemsthatitisn'timpossibletosolvetheproblemandattractthescientistsandthelikebackhomesolongasgreatimportanceisattachedtotheintellectual'sdeservingtreatmentandeffectivemeasuresaretakentoprovidethemwithexcellentpayandagreeableconditions.
MyViewonFakeCommoditiesTheprevalenceoffakecommoditieshasbeenabigprobleminoursociety.
Almosteverydaynewspaperscarryarticlespertainingtofakecommodities.
Althoughmeasureshavebeenimplementedtodealwiththisproblem,itstillremainsaseriousthreat.
Fakegoodsareharmfulonmanylevels.
Peoplesellfakecommoditiestomakeaquickprofitwhichunderminestheeconomyandfakegoodscanalsobedangeroustoone'shealth.
Theeffectisageneralmistrustamongconsumerstowardsellersandthefreemarketingeneral.
Inaddition,manyfakecommoditieshavebeenexportedoverseaswhichhasresultedinapoorreputationforgoodscomingoutofChinaandhashadanegativeinfluenceonexports.
Thereareseveralwaystoaddressthisproblem.
Lawsandregulationsshouldbeimplemented/make/workouttobanthemanufacturinganddistributionoffakegoods.
Atthesametime,consumersshouldbeeducatedtoenhancetheawarenessofidentifythesefakegoods.
Withtoughlawsandaneducatedpublic,fakegoodswillbecomeathingofthepast.
用MyViewOnFakeCommodity改写BrainDrainBrainDrainBraindrainisadelicateproblemwithwhichourcountryisconfronted.
Inthelasttenyearsorso,alotofscientistsandtechnicianshaveswarmedintodevelopedcountriesforfurtherstudiesorresearchwork,letalonenumerouspromisingstudents.
Andtherearenoindicationsthattheywillbebackhomebeforelong.
Ourcountryhaspaidtheexpensesoftrainingthembutlostthem.
HowdidthatcomeaboutItisself-evidentthattheirdelayofcomingbackisduetothosefavorableworkingandlivingconditionswhichareessentialtoresearchwork.
Sophisticatedequipmentmakesiteasierforonetogainacademicachievements.
Ourcompetentscientistsabroadareofferedhigherrewardsandgreateropportunitieswhichcontributetotheirsuccessincareer.
Itseemsthatitisn'timpossibletosolvetheproblemandattractthescientistsandthelikebackhomesolongasgreatimportanceisattachedtotheintellectual'sdeservingtreatmentandeffectivemeasuresaretakentoprovidethemwithexcellentpayandagreeableconditions.
MyViewOnBrainDrainTheprevalenceofbraindrainhasbeenadelicateprobleminoursociety.
Almosteverydaynewspaperscarryarticlespertainingtobraindrain.
Althoughmeasureshavebeenimplementedtodealwiththisproblem,itstillremainsaseriousthreat.
Itisself-evidentthattheirdelayofcomingbackisduetothosefavorableworkingandlivingconditionswhichareessentialtoresearchwork.
Sophisticatedequipmentmakesiteasierforonetogainacademicachievements.
Ourcompetentscientistsabroadareofferedhigherrewardsandgreateropportunitieswhichcontributetotheirsuccessincareer.
社会现象和个人两个方面来阐述Thereareseveralwaystoaddressthisproblem.
Lawsandregulationsshouldbeimplemented/make/workouttobantheintellectual'sdeservingtreatment.
Atthesametime,pepoleshouldbeeducatedtoenhancetheawarenessofthemwithexcellentpayandagreeableconditions.
Withtoughlawsandaneducatedpublic,braindrainwillbecomeathingofthepast.